Where There Is a Will, There Is a Way

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回复 4# Cinderella


    thank you

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回复 5# Cinderella


    我也发现自己写作文时很容易切换主语。以前没有意识到这跟强调的重点关，现在一读，感觉的确不一样······以后好好注意，突出重点来

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Besides the function of instruction, a will can also make us alert to the necessary information that ...
Cinderella 发表于 2012-12-2 23:12

    我后来记起来了，我是想用process 而不是promote的，是想说·····我们就能筛选信息，处理信息，然后把这些信息转化为自己的

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回复 8# Cinderella


    这就是我写议论文，写着写着，就情不自禁地从we转到you
或从you转到we了

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回复 3# Cinderella


    刚刚仔细想了一下，我的逻辑证明是错的。我本想说明他们之间的逻辑关系，证明充分性和必要性的，现在感觉两个之间应该是既不充分也不必要。

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It's really a happy coincidence that in different languages exists the similar expression as "where there is a will, there is a way." Our ancestors, though scattered in different corners on the earth, have amazingly acquired the same wisdom, that is, a strong will may ensure a way leading to our realization of our glorious dreams. So, why does a strong will have such magic power as helping us to gain what we want?
       To start with, a will is to us what the beacon of light is to a fisher at the sea, which can lighten the unknown life and guide us to where we want. In our early years, we all sworn to be great men, for example, scientists, doctors, masters of drawing, musicians and so on. In spite of that, few of us realized them in our later life. Anyway, for most of us, we were merely giving a springing answer to the question raised by the teachers instead of stating our wishes. When we said we wanted to be as great as Beethoven, we might have no idea about what Beethoven was famous for. As a result, we are being shaped by the influence impacted on us, only to find we have been a bank clerk after twenty years. On the contrary, as for a few children who do realize their dreams, they have been keeping his will to be a great man. Barack Obama, when a grade-three pupil, wrote in his composition that he wanted to be president of the USA, and he did it. His dream saved him from going blindly forward,  and spurred him on without slight hesitation.
    Besides the function of guidance, a will can also make us alert to the necessary information, which we will select from what we receive, process  and put into practice. Just take us English majors for example. When we walk and look around, we will pay more attention to the translation of the commercials instead of the designation of them; when others are cheering for the Christmas Day, we will engage ourselves in comparing the difference between Chinese culture and western culture. As long as we are clear about what we want, we will make the best of what we get, therefore receiving most benefits within least time.
   Furthermore, a strong will that stems from great curiosity or intense interest and sense of responsibility may contribute to our persistency in pursuing our goal, which is indispensable in finding a way. One who shows great curiosity about or intense interest in making small devices, for instance, have larger possiblities to become a great inventor, for his curiosity or interest would spur him on and on, however difficult it might be. As is mentioned before, sense of responsibility also contributes to persistency. Former Chinese premier Zhou Enlai, for example, out of his strong sense of responsibility to "study for stronger national power of China", strived throughout his life to make China more powerful. It was this sense of responsibility that had helped him overcome all the obstacles and find a way out of no way.
    To sum up, only when we keep a strong will, can we find the way to success. So hold you strong will, to start of the way, on the way and till the end of the way.

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那个结尾想了好久，真不知道怎么写了，不确定语法上有没有错误的

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感觉老师的句子写的很好，有的直接借用了

Cinderella

回复 16# 徐雪梅1008班


    非常好！这篇文章和上篇文章已经不在一个等级上了，如果上篇打70，这篇可以打85-90了！结构紧凑，表达流畅，语篇连贯，词义到位，搭配得当。就是最后一段还差一点。

Cinderella

fisher at the sea ，应该是fisher at sea吧？